"One of the strongest aspects of this script is the realistic dialogue, as some of the conversations between Dave and Jack are among the best moments. It’s vital for deep stories like these to be centered on characters that the audiences will be interested in enough to follow along with, and we get a sense of who they are and how they’re affected by the atmosphere of their world almost right off the bat, and so we’re immediately engaged in them as characters as they decide to escape and start a new life.

The structure here feels a bit free-flowing. Appropriately, it feels as though we are sort of coasting through life with the characters, reflecting the fact that they don’t really have much of an overall plan or goal, which works in the script’s favor; emphasizing realism by not following a strict three act structure, but due to the strength of the overall pacing, the script never feels as if it isn’t progressing; Jack and Dave don’t spend too much time in one town before leaving and continuing on their journey. This reflects the mentality of the main characters, which is a strong idea."

— INDUSTRIAL SCRIPTS

"Dave is a great source of comedy throughout the script - watching him become so frustrated with Jack's accidental successes with women brings a sense of fun to a character that is absolutely not meant to be fun.

Jack is a deeply interesting character with a horrific past. Both his backstory and his character arc mark the darkest elements of the script. For Jack as a character to turn to the punk scene to express his anger at the world makes sense. His life has already undergone moments of great anarchy before the audience meets him. In particular the scene where Jack's rape is disclosed to the audience is intensely crafted, and is likely to impart a real sense of horror with the audience. Another point which was well told was when Jack tells Judith and Carole the story of his love for Felina. The concept of a suicidal punk rocker looking after two children could potentially be catastrophic, however the scene surprisingly ends sweetly. By the end of the script it is clear what Dave was looking for all along was to keep Jack around; Jack and Dave needed to split apart only to realize they needed each other.”

— THE SCRIPT LAB

""The script has an excellent authenticity to it, bolstered significantly by an intimacy between the two protagonists. These punk rockers lack motivation, but there’s something softly poetic and satisfying in watching the two of them twist and turn in the wind; the way characters interact and how comfortable you are to focus on downtime, rather than on big plot events, makes the script very believable. Dave and Jack's philosophy is explained in an entertaining and crystal-clear manner. It's compelling and it rings true. In premise and potential, it's almost reminiscent of a film by the Coen Brothers, examining a specific community at a specific time."

— ScriptUp